i'm bored, it's 4 AM and I'm still on a caffine rush.

Sonic_Cyclone · #1 04.09.07, 12:28 PM

Ok, it's not 4 AM when I'll post this but hey it sounds better then "hey this is my new song.."

So this is a song I wrote/am writting and would appreciate any criticism on the thing.
It's meant to be a muddy surf kinda song, but anyhow here it is.

"Face Space"

I think therefore I am
I thought therefore I was
I think therefore I am
I think?

But I'm never wrong
I'm always right
I have only ever been
temporarily mislead.

And after getting to know myslef
I've found nothing
Absolutley nothing
I've found nothing that would mark me
As the saviour of humanity

Lately I've been wondering
Pondering the existential relavance
Should I drive to work?
Should I walk to school?
Or maybe, just maybe
Should I pack my lunch?

And after getting to know myslef
I've found nothing
Absolutley nothing
I've found nothing that would mark me
As the saviour of humanity

There was a line
You walked that line
There was a line
And you crossed it

iaresee · #2 04.09.07, 3:44 PM

I don't have anything to say about the lyrics but Space Face is an awesome Sub-Sub song. Sub-Sub was Doves before they were Doves. An influence?

Sonic_Cyclone · #3 04.10.07, 9:42 AM

no, can't say I've ever evan heard of them.
Face Space is supposed to be an combination of Facebook and Myspace. As the lyrics are supposed to poke fun at that whole bit.

republic · #4 04.10.07, 12:22 PM

i like these lyrics! one thing that stands out to me is that you say a lot about what you havent found but maybe have a line in there about what you might find or might like to find. my reasoning is that it gives a more full picture of you (or whomever the character is in the song) it helps people relate which is one of the most important aspects of an great song.

Sonic_Cyclone · #5 04.10.07, 4:21 PM

That's an idea I hadn't really thought about, maybe I could work something in. Thanks for the suggestion.

p.s. I checked out your band just now on myspace and was impressed, if yr ever in toledo, OH or Detroit let me know, eh?

SFP · #6 04.10.07, 6:03 PM

that sounds like it'd be good in a surf song. kind of some hyper lyrics that go along with some hyper guitar part. is that what you're going for?

Sonic_Cyclone · #7 04.10.07, 7:17 PM

yeah, I'm trying to start another band (other than the one I'm in now) where the concept is "lake erie surf". basically taking 60's surf intsrumentals and adding some lake erie grime.

CompadreAlto · #8 05.08.07, 7:50 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Sonic_Cyclone

Lately I've been wondering
Pondering the existential relavance
Should I drive to work?
Should I walk to school?
Or maybe, just maybe
Should I pack my lunch?

Absolutely Love this 'verse'. Quite good, cheers kind sir.